Last week, we began our discussion of using sensory images in our writing by exploring our sense of smell. We continued our sensory theme this week, but we are focusing on describing what we hear. After a somewhat animated brainstorming session, our class came up with this. All I did was type it.
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This was not my day. I thought I could get away with skipping homework, but my teacher had another idea. After the fifth day of not doing my homework, she declared that she was going to call my dad. Maybe he could fix my problem.
After a dreadful bus ride, I went into my house, up to my room, and closed the door. Dad didn’t get home until 4:05 on Fridays, so I knew that I had 30 agonizing minutes until I was dead meat. As every second expired, my heart pounded harder and harder.
Then I heard the car. Dad skidded his black Escalade to a halt in the driveway. My dog Bear started scratching and whimpering pitifully at the door. Dad turned off the ignition and violently slammed the door as he got out of the car. He seemed bloodthirsty. I could hear his monstrous footsteps stomping toward the door. The faster the footsteps went, the faster my heart beat. Dad tried the door but it was locked. This only made him more furious. I could hear him struggling to get out his keys as he jingled them with rage. He turned the knob extremely hard and burst through the solid oak door into the house. I heard the briefcase slam on the hard wood floor. My stomach churned in fear as I heard him ferociously stomp up the stairs. He cracked his knuckles on his way down the hall. I could hear him breathing quickly as he approached my bedroom. When he finally got to the door, I heard him grab the knob slowly and angrily. Then the door creeked open.
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Well, what did you think? Feel free to leave a comment on this post with suggestions or encouragement. Look for stories that use this technique on the student blogs at the end of the week (will be titled A5)!
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